Saturday, June 13, 2015

Serial Saturday: "The Telmar Trilogy, Vol. 3: The Legacy of Telmar" Part 10

"It did not occur to her until later that evening what she had done...."

[Excerpt from Chapter 20]

From that day forward, Mrs. Lefay developed an intense, mysterious fixation with "going back." She couldn't remember, no matter how hard she tried (not even with magic), where she came from, but she desperately wanted to go there.
After a week of hard thinking, she recalled the word "tree," but it could not be said if she lived upon a tree, under a tree, around a tree, beside a tree, or even within a tree.
She began leaving her house more often, to search for a "way back." The police brought her back to the Ketterleys' once, saying they found her in the park, feeling the trees, sometimes shaking the smaller ones. She spoke of that incident sadly, and as if she thought the trees should have had voices.
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Mrs. Lefay tried to walk down the street, but her feet kept getting in the way. What is more, the whole road just wouldn't hold still, but rolled up and down like a stormy sea. Perhaps she needed more of the tarven's brew? She took another drink. It was like liquid fire in her throat! Mrs. Lefay moaned in pain.

Something crossed her path; what was it? Her eyesight was blurry. It was only a common, stray cat, but in the old woman's intoxicated brain it grew to the size of a lion. Instead of a mangy stray, Mrs. Lefay saw the Great Lion!

"You!" Mrs. Lefay rasped as the world tilted beneath her. "You've done this to me! It's all your fault!" Angrily, she threw the first thing she could find at the Lion: the bottle in her hand.

The crash almost jolted Mrs. Lefay from her stupor. She blinked and the Lion disappeared. In its place, she saw what she had done: The bottle had crashed through the window of a jewelry shop. Its contents, the brown "medicine," cascaded over the displays, drawing her attention to the object in the center: a ring.

Yes! That was what she needed! A ring brought her there, a ring would certainly send her back! The jeweler was in the back room, and thus it appeared that the store was empty, but even that did not deter the inebriated Mrs. Lefay as she grabbed the ring and headed down the street to the Ketterley house.

Andrew had just stepped onto the porch when she neared the house. She waved to him and shouted, "Yoo-hoo!"

The young boy glanced up just in time to see a crowd of policemen closing in on the woman. He ran down the steps toward her, hoping to reach her before they did.
Too late! They surrounded her just as he approached. "Mrs. Lefay!" he cried.

"Andrew!" the old woman gasped, "Andrew!" She pressed something into his hand. "Save this for me; it's my way back," she said, and they dragged her away.

Andrew looked at the object in his hand. A ring sparkled up at him.
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[Excerpt from Chapter 21

"Mrs. Lefay: Guilty on charges of vandalism, disturbing the peace, violence, and mental instability. Sentence, seven years!"

The judge dropped his gavel, and it was final. With a last pitiful glance at Andrew, Mrs. Lefay allowed the bailiff to lead her away.

Andrew sulked all that day, and would have remained thus for all seven years, but his parents sent him away to boarding school. He would have forgotten the crazy old woman, but it happened that he was home for a holiday when they released her. Andrew, now grown to a young man of nineteen years, departed to see his old friend straight away.

He knew the moment he entered her old room at the Burgundy Place: she was dying. How weak and haggard she looked against the pillow! She made neither movement nor sound as Andrew meekly approached her bedside and laid the ring before her on the coverlet.

The instant she saw it, her eyes gleamed. "Can this then be the hour of my release?" she breathed. Mrs. Lefay seized the ring triumphantly. "You wonderful boy!" she cried, "Now you will witness the truth about me!"

"What do you mean?" Andrew asked.

Mrs. Lefay smiled on him. "Look at me, Andrew. Do I seem as one of your fairies?"

Andrew shook his head, but then he caught her meaning. He stared at her in awe. "Truly, Mrs. Lefay?" he breathed.

The woman nodded. "Yes; this old mortal soul has fairy blood in her veins. Let that be a lesson to you, young man! The most ordinary humans may have fairy blood in them, anyone from a charwoman to a duchess! I myself am among the last of that exquisite breed." And she sighed over the fate of her race.

"But Mrs. Lefay," Andrew gasped, "why do you tell me this now?"

Mrs. Lefay grew very sad again. "I am ill, Andrew; I expected to die soon. But now that I have the ring . . ." she paused to gaze at it glittering in her palm.

"What will the ring do?"

The old fairy-woman frowned upon him as if she thought him a dull schoolboy asking silly questions. "It was by a ring I came here, and it is by a ring I shall go back." The frown disappeared and she smiled at him again, "and because of your faithfulness to me, you, Andrew Richard Ketterley, shall have the honor of witnessing this great event!"

Andrew's eyes glowed at this prospect. Imperiously, Mrs. Lefay held up her hand in front of her face. "Behold my departure!" she cried, and slipped the ring on her finger.

Nothing happened, though boy and woman waited with bated breath.
Disappointed, Mrs. Lefay handed the ring back to Andrew. "Oh dear, it's only a common ring, nothing magic about it at all! That won't do. Please be so kind as to return it for me, Andrew."

Andrew was puzzled. "You mean, the ring does not belong to you? Where did you get it?" When she told him the name of the jewelry store, he cried in alarm, "Why, you did not steal it, did you, Mrs. Lefay?"

"Of course not! I had every intention of putting it to good use! If I wasn't so ill, I'd return it myself."

Because of their relationship, Andrew was loath to think badly of Mrs. Lefay, so he did not notice her deliberate dodge of his question. He accepted the ring from her hand. "But how am I to return the ring without being seen?"

Mrs. Lefay got a queer glint in her eye. "For a long time, we have talked about magic, haven't we, Andrew?"

The young man nodded.

"And you remember all I have told you about making sure that you remain in control over it, and use it to your advantage, but not for evil purposes, don't you?"

He nodded again.

"Well, since you do, I think you are ready to know some real magic."

He looked up and grinned craftily. "Really, Mrs. Lefay?"

She nodded. "When you reach the store, say these words, and no one in there will even notice you at all."

She gave him certain words to speak (but I shall not print them), and he departed.

It did not occur to her until late that evening what she had done. She recalled Aslan's prophecy as clearly as if he were in the room, repeating it to her: "Your offspring will learn of your magic, and bythat knowledge a great Evil will come to Narnia."

Every memory she had of her Narnian life came rushing back in one awful knell.
"No!" Mrs. Lefay screeched, "Curse you, Aslan! Curse your prophecies!"
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What will become of Mrs. Lefay, and young Andrew--and the box? Follow the links to find out! Meanwhile, back in Telmar....

[Excerpt from Chapter 22] Melanie stared at the paper in her hand as she sat on her throne in the palace of Nast. It was a letter from the King himself in Narnia!
 
To the Lady Melanie, Regent of Nast,
Greetings from His Highness, Caspian the Eighth, King in Narnia;
 
I have heard of your faithful work, how you have served my country with miraculous success, even though it is not your native land.
 
This letter is meant to congratulate you for your diligence and commitment to excellence.
I have also lately learned of your beliefs, which are unfortunately rampant here in Narnia.
 
I, King Caspian, therefore invite you most cordially here to my castle in Narnia, that I might show you the birthplace of that which you believe. I would also be most interested to converse with you more about this singular form of spiritism.

In the Mighty Name of His Most Regal Majesty,
King Caspian VIII
 

Friday, June 12, 2015

Reader's Review: "Sky Knight" by Sandra Harvey


Synopsis from Amazon

Taliah Storme is a sky knight, a protector of the Skylands. Armed with an airship and a full crew, her newest task should be a simple one: bring in the sky pirate captain, Erikson Roarke. Yet the mission proves to be more challenging than anticipated when Taliah finds herself stranded in the perilous Lowerlands with the criminal she was supposed to arrest. While dealing with the dangers of the surface world, Taliah also has to find a way to work with Erikson in order to return to the skies. Her conviction towards capturing the pirate begins to fade, however, when she uncovers strange incidents related to the Skylands. Now doubting her very purpose, Taliah plunges towards the truth, disregarding all warnings to stop searching for answers.
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My Review:


"The most beautiful part of the Skylands was its sunrise..."

The first sentence of a novel is always most important—and Harvey nails it. Another important factor that is really difficult for a lot of writers is point of view—and she nailed it again.

The point of view is so strong that the reader becomes Taliah, the tenacious Sky Knight who always gets her target and is not afraid of a scuffle, who thinks living in the Skylands—powered by and dependent on the mysterious mineral fulminite—is infinitely preferable to crawling around the surface of the Lowlands—a place she'll only go in pursuit of her quarry.
Taliah receives a commission to chase down an elusive pirate who has become more myth than man—and her life will never be the same.

The descriptions in this book are fabulous. I felt my own breath catching in my throat during one scene in which the character is free-falling when an airship gets knocked down. I felt the grit in my teeth and smelled the stink of coal when Taliah descended to the Lowlands. I could hardly contain the emptiness I felt when one of her good friends dies.

The characters, too, are lively and dynamic, from Rourke, who prides himself on never being caught and threatens to kill Taliah upon their first meeting, to Taliah herself, "the coarsest woman on the planet"—indeed, out of all the swearing that happens in this book, I think most of it is from Taliah. But the characters are intriguing and energetic--I got to the end and not only do I very much want to read more, but Harvey has indeed left more to discover, such as (but not limited to): Gizmo's backstory, more about the fantastically rich world she has established--I was reminded a lot of the atium mines and the social/political landscape of Brandon Sanderson's Mistborn, and I see that same potential to be a novel like that one, even on a greatly simplified (and thus higher-energy!) scale.

I had so much fun reading this! "Sky Knight" gets a full *****FIVE STAR***** rating, and if you're the sort that likes a dieselpunk sort of vibe, with airships and sky pirates and plenty of battles to be had (and don't mind a generous sprinkling of "f-bombs" along the way) then this book is for you!

Further Reading: (Steampunk/Strong Women/Excellent World-building)
-AmsterDamned--Nils Visser
Starstruck Saga--S. E. Anderson
       -Starstruck 
The Red Dog Conspiracy--Patricia Loofbourrow
       -The Alcatraz Coup 
       -Jacq of Spades 
       -Queen of Diamonds

The Chronicles of Lorrek--Kelly Blanchard
        -Someday I'll Be Redeemed 
        -I Still Have A Soul 
        -I'm Still Alive 
        -Do You Trust Me? 
        -You Left Me No Choice 

The Jill Andersen Series--J. D. Cunegan
       -Bounty 
       -Blood Ties 
       -Behind the Badge

The Vemreaux Trilogy--Mary E. Twomey
       -The Way 
       -The Truth 
       -The Lie 

Lord of the Wyrde Woods--Nils Visser
     -Escape From Neverland 
     -Dance Into The Wyrd

The LouisiAngel Series--C. L. Coffey
        -Angel in Training 
        -Angel Eclipsed 
        -Angel Tormented 

Judah Black Series--E. A. Copen
       -Guilty By Association 
       -Blood Debt


Thursday, June 11, 2015

Throwback Series: "The Day of Reckoning" (Prologue Part 2)


The Elitinati Mentor swept past the muttering knots of novices receiving wyrt-therapy. He stroked his own wyrt--a small, bulbous, fuzzy creature with many foot-pad-like appendages and no eyes--comfortingly.

Therein lay the secret of the Elitinati "enlightenment." This was the reason the Temple was built where it was, and the city established as the Capitol: they built it over a deep cavern housing the wyrt-mother, and she made it possible to spy on every person, at every time, and for those who actually allowed the wyrt to "settle" on them, the Elitinati could use the mother to control and direct their thoughts, feelings, and actions. The more wyrts present, the more complete the control. Only the Council had command over their own minds enough to be able to influence the mother herself, and because of the hive-mind nature of the wyrts, whatever they told her, she communicated this to the rest of her "children," and the entire nation felt it.

Strange, though; only in Eillumaeia had the Elitinati been able to convince the people that the wyrts were a necessary fashion item, or at least a harmless pet that you let ride on your shoulder; those who "discovered" the "enlightening" qualities of the wyrts were immediately admitted into the Temple-University to receive Elitinati training and become wholly committed to the cause. They became Elitinati Mentors when they realized the control of the wyrt enough to then begin asserting control over it, thereby "freeing" themselves all the more, while remaining inextricably dependent on the knowledge the wyrt hive-mind provided for them.

Those in the Outlands, though, viewed the fuzzy, brightly-colored creatures as wild pests, not something you welcomed in your home or on your person. Out there, the Elitinati could only look on and keep track of the movements of the populace, sending out soldiers or operatives whenever they saw questionable activity. It didn't matter, anyway; there were more than enough people in Eillumaeia itself to keep the Elitinati "tradition" going for a long while.

The Mentor reached the door to the Inner Sanctum, and saluted the guards. He bent down and released his wyrt into the room first, closing his eyes and focusing on assuming the senses of the creature, which (even without eyes) had the ability to sense danger. The Mentor found none, only a silent admittance. He entered as another wyrt climbed onto his boot.
Immediately, an Elitinati Lord's voice sounded in his head.
"What is it?"

"I have seen the stranger spoken of by Captain Lyam, milord," the Mentor murmured.
"And has he yet taken a wyrt?"

"No, milord; I tried sending them toward him many times, but--" the man hesitated.

It didn't matter; the price of being a Mentor was that the Lords of the Council could read your mind. "What do you mean, 'he was invisible to them'?" The voice demanded angrily.

The Mentor shrugged, "In faith, I do not know, myself. You know how wyrts are, they can latch on without the person noticing--but these creatures would not even latch! He walked all the way through the very center of town, and I was snatching wyrts off of people and directing them toward him, but every time, they seemed to scuttle right past him without stopping."

"Are you saying that you have lost your ability to control the wyrts?" The Lord demanded, and the Mentor was keenly aware of the teeming mass of wyrts that had been scattered through the room were all now converging toward him. He closed his eyes and imagined the consciousness of each creature, and commanded them to stop and move away from him. He opened his eyes, and saw that they obeyed him. He sighed with relief and smiled.

"No, your excellence, I still control them. I do not know why they have failed so far."

"Hmmm... Perhaps the stranger has some sort of mental spell that must be overcome before he can be susceptible. At any rate, soon we won't have to worry about people shunning or losing those unsightly puffballs any longer."

The Mentor grinned, "It is true, then, about the Innoculations?"

He sensed something akin to pleasure and pride in the Lord's voice as he replied, "It is true, young Mentor; we are in the process of discovering the neuro-genetics that allow the wyrts to network, and soon, we will be able to use that network ourselves, and it will be every bit as inconspicuous as the wyrts are here in Eillumaeia, and furthermore it will be completely invisible, so that the people under our control will not be noticed, even in the Outworld."
The Mentor rubbed his hands, "The Outworlders will think they're receiving their normal vaccinations, when in fact they will be receiving wyrt-neurons to replace their own! Magnificent, my Lord!"

The tone of the Lord's voice returned to derision, "Of course you think it's magnificent; that is why I am a Lord and you are only a Mentor. Your mind is still puny; go and study some more."
The Mentor bobbed his head, "Yes, milord." He crossed over to a knot of Mentors poring over thick books, and purposed to get through at least an entire shelf by the evening meal.

Meanwhile, in the streets of Eillumaeia, a Stranger walked, shrouded in a cloak, ignored by the brain-washed populace, taking everything in with keen, piercing eyes that seemed to see into the soul. The Stranger exhaled in the smoggy evening air, and continued walking, never ceasing, toward the desired destination: a certain building, wherein sat a certain person who would begin the chain of events that would forever change the face of this world.
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The squadron at Gate E16 watched everyone coming and going carefully. Ever since the mysterious stranger (who seemed to have disappeared by now) entered and made that declaration about the "Day of Reckoning," the guards had been fully on alert to every stranger coming in.
The commanding officer at the gate, Captain Tankar, heard the distinct whine of a hover-coach and called his men to attention.

A large black craft sailed into view at the gate. The Captain recognized it easily; the Elitinati Watchtower (their common symbol) was emblazoned in gold on the side. It was the hover-coach of Sister Miligred, who had gone to visit some friends off-planet.

Captain Tankar immediately gave the signal to open the gates, and Sister Miligred entered unhindered. As the gates closed behind her, the Captain looked down at the checklist of itineraries, which all those leaving Eillumaeia were required to submit prior to departure. Sister Miligred--but her itinerary stated that she would not return for five more days! But that was undeniably her coach! What was the meaning of this? Captain Tankar reached into his collar and brushed the fur of his wyrt. Such stimulation was considered an alarm by the Mentor watching over him. Immediately, the Mentor sent a detachment of soldiers toward the hover-coach, which was now making its way through the streets to the dwelling of Sister Miligred.

Using magnetic cable-guns, they brought the craft to a halt and, as was protocol, the lieutenant in charge called, "Hail the Elitinati! Sister Miligred, we request an audience with you."
"What?" Her cold, hard voice issued from the darkness within the craft, "Here in the streets? You fool! You really think I will show my face because some soldier orders me to? What is the meaning of this?"

The lieutenant blushed and stammered, "Well, ah--" of course the Sister would not know! She had departed before the stranger arrived! "There was a stranger in here recently, who made some threatening statements--"

"And now you suspect me of treason?" Sister Miligred's voice rose in anger, and her long, jewel-ringed, pale hand appeared at the sill of the window. "Fie! Why would I be in league with such rabble who speak subversively against my brethren?"

"Madam," the lieutenant moved on to a more pertinent issue, "It seems you cut your intended visit short; may we know the reason?"

There came no reply for several minutes. The Lieutenant worried that the powerful, irate woman was now so incensed that she was too overcome to speak. He waited for his fate to be sealed--
"...They were dead."

The lieutenant started, "Dead, madam?"

"Yes! You may as well announce it to the whole town, calling me out like this! I spent half that time traveling out to my friends on another planet, but when I got there, they were all dead! The planet was a wasteland, and not a word of warning!"

The lieutenant could now hear soft sobs issuing from the depths of the hover-coach.

"Please," Sister Miligred begged in a voice much gentler than any she had used before, "may I proceed to my home, that I may grieve respectfully for them?"

The lieutenant bowed his head and released the cable. His men did the same. "Yes, Madam; my condolences. You may go."

Hastily, the detachment returned to elsewhere in the city. Had they remained but a few minutes longer, they might have seen a certain figure approach the black carriage: a cloaked figure, invisible to the wyrts. Quickly, a hand reached out to help the passenger--but it was not the same hand the lieutenant had seen. This one was younger, and stronger. The black hover-coach sailed onward to the mansion, where the passengers were able to pass via an exit-tube straight into the building without being seen.
No one thought it odd, though, or thought about it at all; the Elitinati were famous for not wanting to be seen.

Captain Tankar marked "Sister Miligred" off his list--but on the world she was visiting, there stood a grave with another name, bearing the corpse of the woman known by that name. The inhabitants were truly all dead, victims of a brutal attack. That much was true. The one who returned to Eillumaeia would grieve her friends--and she would grieve for her family as well, though not in the manner of the Elitinati. She would grieve--and she would plan.

The Day of Reckoning was coming.
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Monday, June 8, 2015

The Great Upstream Writer Countdown



 
No, it's not the final countdown... but I am counting down to something..... So I decided to include all of the other things with it.... 
So, for those of you who wonder what exactly it is I am up to these days; for those who are new to my blog and aren't really sure what in the world is going on here; for those who just want to see practically everything I have on this blog, all linked to one post...
 
This is for you. Thanks for following this blog. I would go higher, but that might take too long...

Starting with:


16 
Participants in the second Suggestion Box series
15 
five-star Featured Reviews
14 
13 
Segments in the first Suggestion Box
12 
11 
 ideas that I have taken notes for but have not started writing yet: Triangle, The Britannica Cycle: All The Swans in England, Where Heather Blooms in Scotland, The Last Snake in Ireland; Persuasion and Pixies, The ReBible Series: Go Down (the story of Moses, set post-Civil War), The Mother Lode (the story of Abraham and Sarah, Isaac and Rebekah, Jacob and Esau, set during the Western expansion of the mid-1800s), The Remnant Resonance (the story of Ruth, set during Great Depression), Proof of Life (the story of Paul of Tarsus, set during 20th century), The Astonishing Adventures of Jonah (the story of Jonah, set during 20th century), NARCIS (the story of Noah, set in the 25th century)
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books planned in the ReBible series in all (so far....) four of which I must think about overhauling and preparing to rewrite them completely come NaNoWriMo (normally known as November)
9 
8 
print books (and 1 ebook) on my Summer Reading List: in addition to the library books, I have two books I received for free as door prizes at two different events: Somewhere Safe with Somebody Good (by Jan Karon) and Embittered Ruby (by Nicole O'Dell)
more days left of school (which is my job)
library checkouts to read and finish over the summer: The Magician (by Michael Scott), Outlander (by Diana Gabaldon), The Sum of All Fears (by Tom Clancy), Firefight (by Brandon Sanderson), Code (by Kathy and Brendan Reichs)
Fanfics waiting to be written or finished, and they all happen to be Supernatural fanfics: "An Embarrassment of Witches" (dealing with events from this current season), "Angels Take Milwaukee" (a Supernatural/Doctor Who crossover), "A Midsummer's Nightmare" (because a Supernatural twist on a Shakespeare comedy was just too good to pass up!) and "Betty and the Beast" (mostly because I think the Northwest is best, so Leavenworth, Wa seemed like a fantastic location for a mystery)
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 novel projects started and abandoned in the editing stages: Laurel of Andar, Fairies Under Glass/ Return to Phantasm, and A Writer's Tale: Extended Series
Works in Progress: "The Last Inkweaver", an original fantasy novel, needs only one more chapter; also a story based on a fanfiction I wrote with a completely original plot that will become the screenplay for a small web series produced by a friend of mine... Which apparently cannot even start until I finish the story, so that's a thing...
 
And finally.... the moment of truth....
 
Novella to be published this year: Princess of Undersea
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Here's to more great stuff showing up here on The Upstream Writer! 
 
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Saturday, June 6, 2015

Serial Saturday: "The Telmar Trilogy, Vol. 3: The Legacy of Telmar" Part 9

"The child," she gasped... "What is the name of the child?"
[Excerpt from Chapter 16]
Leif closed her eyes and muttered some words under her breath. A strong wind suddenly blew through the garden and around Melanie, and seemed to carry Leif away with it, as her body disintegrated into blossoms of some strange Narnian tree. The "Leif-petals" swirled around the fearful Melanie twice before settling back into the form of a woman, and becoming the Leif Melanie recognized.

"I am a dryad," she said, "a tree-nymph from Narnia. I do not age as long as my tree is still alive. My real name is Leafy."
[…]
“In Narnia, all the Talking Animals, Dryads, Naiads, Dwarves, and Fauns have gone into hiding. The King is intent on destroying every last vestige of Old Narnia, as it is now called.
"This is why I left, and why I now must return, dear Melanie. I have just received news that my tree is marked for extermination, so I must go back to my tree and do what I can. If I cannot save it, I will die. Even if I do detain them, they will probably kill me for who I am, for the forests are evil to Telmarines."

Melanie nodded; such "logical" superstition had crossed the bridge from this world into hers. "If you must go, then, Leafy, I wish you luck," Melanie said with a sigh, "May Aslan grant you success on your mission."
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So saying, the two friends parted, with Melanie retiring into the castle, and Leafy out of the garden and into the City. 
Once she was alone in the alleyways, Leafy reached into the folds of her petticoat and drew out a small, carved chest. She stroked it and whispered, "Ah yes, soon I will go; but not to Narnia. It is not safe there."

"Where are you going, foolish dryad?"

At the bold inquiry, Leafy whirled around to behold and old sage in a hooded robe the color of midnight, with a long, snow-white beard. He leaned on a gnarled staff.
"Who—what are—how . . . how did you know?" she gasped frantically.

The old man gazed piercingly at her. "The Lion has sent me with a warning: if you cross into the other world, you can never resume your dryad form, but you will become wholly human, therefore you will age as a human. It will most likely be a painful experience for you."

Leafy sighed and steeled herself. She fixed her goal in her mind: she would take the box of jewels she had stolen from Melanie, use them to enter Melanie's world, book passage to New Telmar (which she had been so clever to research in all her questions about Melanie's past!), and use her knowledge of magic to impress the superstitious inhabitants of that island, who would no doubt be willing to make her their ruler. "I am ready to bear that pain," she said resolutely.

Leafy fancied she heard the old sage chuckle. "That is only the warning. This is the prophecy: Aslan also says, 'I know of your secret plans, and of your knowledge of magic. If you go, your offspring will learn of your magic, and the knowledge will become a bane to Narnia."
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Carefully, she pried back the lid. She paused a moment to admire the glitter, dreaming greedily of the respect such riches would garner. A large ring set with a ruby rested on the top of the pile. Leafy reached out with a bare hand to touch it.

A gust of wind enveloped her, pulling her in. Leafy could feel her insides losing their airy, blossom-like lightness, and becoming firmer, solidifying. With a rush and a gasp, she found herself in the other world! Leafy, feeling victorious, paused a moment to take in all her surroundings.
The streets were paved with stones. Carriages moved to and fro in the streets. Leafy noted with satisfaction that most of the ladies wore dresses similar to hers. Gracious! What would she have done if her clothing was not in the latest fashion? She stared at all the people walking or riding past her, and some of them had the audacity to stare back.

Finally, her roving eyes caught sight of a certain storefront sign, and she knew that within that building she could find what she needed: SEE THE WORLD! It said, London Travel Agency.
London! Didn't Melanie say that London was the capital of England? Leafy had come to the right place, then; what luck! Leafy recalled the prophecy concerning her offspring. An ingenious plan formed in her mind.
"If I call myself Mrs. Leafy," she said to herself, "I can say I am a widow, and I will never marry, and therefore, have no offspring." She smiled at her own brilliance. Where is your prophecy now, Aslan? She thought to herself. You can't get me here!
Leafy flounced into the Travel Agency and boldly approached the small window at the front. The agent—looking very much like he ought to partake of the service he provided others—asked through his cigar, "Whar would ye like to travel?"

Leafy managed to maintain her composure and avoid breathing the acrid smoke seeping from the man's breath, even as she replied, "I'd like to book passage on a ship to New Telmar."
The rotund man nearly dropped his cigar, a display of emotion the likes of which he hadn't shown since that "loony" came in wanting to book passage to the moon! However, the agent had a reputation to maintain, so he clenched his teeth on his cigar and asked (through another issuing of smoke), "You want to—what?"

Leafy wondered at his consternation. She repeated, "I would like to go to New Telmar."

The travel agent rubbed his scalp. "We have a New England, New Holland, or New Guinea, but I—"

Leafy, assuming she knew the real reason behind his hesitation, pulled out the chest, which was surprisingly intact after its inter-terrestrial journey. "Money, you understand, is not an issue," she said significantly, with a wink.

The clerk sighed, expelling a particularly large cloud of grey smoke into the hazy atmosphere around his head. "It's not the—" he stopped, frustrated by this strange woman's insistence. He left his desk (not a habit he cared to form) and pointed the woman to a large map fastened on the wall. "There!" he said, "If you can find it on this map, I'll find a way to get you there!"
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[Excerpt from Chapter 17]
Leafy's mind whirled frantically as she tried to make sense of the situation and what somewhere—oh, anywhere—at the same time.
So she was in the year 1860. That would be . . . nearly a century before Melanie's time! New Telmar probably did not even exist yet! How could such an unlucky thing happen?
Leafy kept walking until she saw a bench. She sat upon it, feeling a stinging in her eyes as she pondered her fate. Aslan had done this! It was entirely his fault! Angrily, Leafy shook her fist at the sky. Up till now she had been confident that, once outside of Narnia, Aslan had no jurisdiction over her. How terrible to find out that this was not true. All her plans were ruined!

No matter, Leafy thought, at least I still have the chest. She set it on her lap. Gently, secretively, she peeked inside.
A fine, grey dust covered the jewels and coins, but everything seemed intact. Leafy pondered as a sudden idea leaped into her head. By a ring she got here to England; would not that same ring take her back to Telmar? […] Forthwith, the former dryad slipped her delicate fingers into the box, intending to touch the ring and vanish without anyone noticing.

Nothing happened.

Rather than transporting her back to Telmar, the ring—along with all the other contents of the chest—disintegrated into that same fine, grey dust. It seems they weren't quite as intact as they appeared. For a moment, Leafy hardly knew what had happened. Oh, the mischief of Aslan! Now every last particle of her supposed riches was gone, and Leafy now held a chest full of useless grey dust.
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Tears were a new experience to her, but not sorrow; dryads never cried, though they could feel sadness. Leafy's amazement mingled strangely with relief. She was sad, and she cried, but oh! She never realized how good it felt to get out all those tears!

"Hullo, what have we here?"
Leafy started, and looked up from those fascinating tears. A man stood before her; he was a handsome man, with a kind face, and eyes full of pity and concern. "Are you all right, madam?" he inquired politely.

Leafy's first reaction was one of denial. "Yes, I'm fi—" she remembered how matters stood, "No!" she admitted sharply, shedding more tears. "I am much distressed!"

"Is there anything I can do to help?"

Leafy nodded. "Please sir, I am a stranger in this land, with nowhere to live and no money. If you would be so kind as to lend me a small amount of currency, and point me to a place where one such as I can stay, I would be so grateful!"

The man cocked his head at this strange woman, this well-dressed beggar. "Do you not have any friends nearby, who can assist you? What is your name?"

"My name is Mrs. Leafy, and I tell you the truth, I know no other person in this whole land beside yourself."

The man, Leafy could see, hardly knew what to think or do about her plight. "Let me ask my wife. Wait here a moment, Mrs., ah . . . Mrs. Lefay."

He had crossed the lane before she had a chance to correct him. Leafy decided it prudent to merely hold her tongue in the matter. Instead, she watched him as he stepped up to a young woman—obviously expecting—and spoke with her. Leafy deduced that this was the young man's wife. Presently, the pair crossed the lane to where Leafy sat.

"Mrs. Lefay," the man said, persisting in his mistake, "I am Mr. Thomas Ketterley, and this is my wife, Patricia."

He stopped there, and an intense, strange longing welled up within Leafy. "The child," she gasped, gazing deep into Patricia's eyes, "what is the name of the child?" There was something captivating, something drawing her inexplicably to that still-forming life, and it showed in the hungry, desperate expression in her eyes.

Patricia was slightly uncomfortable. "We had thought to name him Andrew Richard," she faltered slightly, wondering at this strange insistence. When "Mrs. Lefay's" face relaxed, Thomas hastened to change the subject.

"Mrs. Lefay, we would be delighted if you would consent to live with us, as our guest."
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Thursday, June 4, 2015

Throwback Series: "The Day of Reckoning" (Prologue Part 1)


A Bit of Background: Some of you know that I completed pretty much my entire education without actually "attending" a brick-and-mortar school; for those that don't, now you do. After home-schooling my way through high school, I joined a relatively-new program called CollegePlus, which is centralized online and allows students to use credit-by-exams to earn college credit for subjects studied at home, which then the student can (in most cases) transfer to the college of his or her choice to earn an actual degree/diploma.
Students from all over the country (and in some foreign countries as well) connect and interact through the CollgePlus Forums. Students can post anything from questions about certain tests, topics, degrees, and study disciplines, to fun stuff like hobbies, interests, and planning get-togethers.
When I joined, my hobby was, of course, writing... and I was a little miffed to discover only one haphazard "writing" thread. I started my own conversation, inviting any interested students--whether they were English majors like I was, or not--to feel free to talk about or post their writing. Many people responded, and I am pretty sure it spawned a movement, because last year when I counted there were more than thirty such "threads" in various forms.
Another popular thread at the time was one called "World War 3", a text-based role-playing "game" that was popular with the nerdy, poli-sci/criminal justice/history types, or the weapon aficionados. It was mostly moderated by one person, but others could moderate "chapters" or "campaigns" of the game. One such jokester decided it would be a "great idea" to instigate a Forum-wide campaign, with players chasing each other around to different threads. A random skirmish ends up on my innocent Writers' Thread... and that was how I got involved. 
Being a writer, not a gamer, I didn't really know much about how to participate in the battle itself, but myself and another writer (and the Chief Moderator of World War 3) named Sam cooked up this idea for a separate story that I could write. He provided the main villainous entity, and I asked World War 3 participants to contribute a character each from the "homeworlds" they managed. (For reference, most of the "Reckoning Team" belongs to these various contributors, except Laurel and Renata, who are my own characters; all the "non-playable characters" they encounter and the specific characters of the antagonist's team are also my invention) And thus, "The Day of Reckoning" was born. (Incidentally, this was about the same time as I was also writing "Protective Custody") I just ran across it yesterday, so I decided I would start posting it on Thursdays. Enjoy this first installment!
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Prologue, Part 1

Eillumaeia, The Land of the Elitinati

Dawn rose over Eillumaeia, the same hazy greyness that had overshadowed the landscape ever since the day the Council of Elitinati convened and amongst themselves decided that the entire nation should comply under one system of belief and governance, establishing the Six Pillars of Illuminus, and establishing that there would be no other law, and any voice of dissent must be silenced.
In the years that followed, the Elitinati enacted their control. The borders of Eillumaeia became readily evident, as every inch of them became lined with walls, both invisible magic and visible stone and iron. Guards patrolled the borders, not just keeping watch over the people coming in--but also seeing that no one left without proper authorization. Elitinati schools and "church-temples" were established in the large cities, and all other houses of education or worship aggressively abolished.
The Council decided on laws, the Council oversaw the training of the military, and the Council proclaimed the Principles of Elitinati as the final word in scientific discovery, both magic and concrete. Any sort of "miracle" or "anomaly" could and should be explained by the Elitinati, and anything they did not deem worth explaining or exploring was dismissed as "falsified data" or "irrelevant mystique." In order to be accepted as an influencing voice in the Elitinati Council, one had to prove their dominance over the Elitinati. Therein the peoples fell; no one could overshadow the Elitinati. Their only hope was extensive study and meditation, to become wiser than the Council; but if the Council controlled the education, what more could anyone learn beyond what the Elitinati already knew? Even the news bulletins and the entertainment was geared toward Elitinati dominance. It was a normal way of life for even the fiction world, and as for the news--well, one never heard much from the world outside, but what of that? What was so important that one could not be satisfied to tolerate the "broad" ways of the Elitinati? Could they not be content in their situation? So long as the Pillars stood, the Elitinati provided comfort for its compliant citizens. They "listened" sympathetically to all complaints and questions, then answered them according to their great wisdom, correcting the person's "mistaken hypotheses" and sending them on their way with a "better understanding" of the "right" way to view the world. A series of gas-spewing factories provided the illusion of economic and employment security, and the overrule was complete.

At Gate SE14, along the southeastern border of Eillumaeia, the captain on duty, Sir Lyam, snapped to attention as the cry of a wind-whistler echoed through the trees. There were no wind-whistlers anywhere near the gates of Eillumaeia, of course--but there were those who could make themselves invisible in the trees, and imitate the noise perfectly.
Sir Lyam peered through the fetid smog as he listened carefully to the steps approaching, knowing that this was all the warning he would get before the traveler (or travelers) came into sight, at which time an enemy would be close enough to kill Lyam and all of his men.

Today, he heard one set of footsteps: a lone traveler, walking very slowly, and very softly. Lyam had to strain so hard to listen for the footfalls that he had to fight to maintain his composure when the traveler cried, "Ho!"
Lyam jerked upright and squinted through the fog; the traveler stood just close enough for Lyam to make out his silhouette, but remained at enough distance to be shrouded in fog.

"Step forth and identify yourself!" Sir Lyam commanded.

The stranger took one step forward, and in a strange, hollow voice, replied, "The Illuminus is the root, the Elitinati is the tree, and the Council is the crown."

Such was the traditional incantation of only the ones lucky enough to be selected for training as an Elitinati, at their chief Training School at the heart of Eillumaeia. Sir Lyam immediately bowed, acknowledging the Elitinati affiliation of the stranger, even if this person was only a novice in the school. Furthermore, Lyam knew that to press an Elitinati for further identification was to risk an inquiry into his own insubordination that would inevitably result in his being sent to work in the deepest regions of the largest factory.

"Enter, O Great One," Lyam replied, opening the magic gate and the iron one for the traveler.

The stranger entered the magic curtain, but paused before the iron gate.
"Tell me, captain," the stranger spoke in that same, strange-sounding tone, that bore alternately a soft treble and a firm, dark sound, "Have you served as Gatekeeper long?"

Sir Lyam considered this question odd, but he did not hesitate as he replied, "Ever since my younger days, Your Excellence."

"And you have seen everyone and everything that has come through this gate since that day?"

Sir Lyam nodded, "I have seen everything, O Enlightened One."

The faceless traveler gave a light chuckle, and responded, "Only one thing you have not seen, Captain; that which I am. Remember this day," the traveler at last stepped through the gate and into the outskirts of Eillumeia, "For today you have seen the Reckoning of the Elitinati!"
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Tuesday, June 2, 2015

Reader's Review: "The Pinocchio Factor" (Alexander Legacy #2) by Sophronia Belle Lyon


Synopsis from Amazon:

Oliver Twist takes up the tale of the company's adventures after "the Battle of the Bronze Cascade". Can he trust Spring-heeled Jack when so many strange things happen each time he comes around? Costume balls conceal more than the faces of the wealthy and powerful. Trevor Newsome disappears just days before the election but they can't search for him from the London Lockup. When the trip to Switzerland finally becomes a reality, it's for a funeral, not for a wedding.

They begin to learn about quests for power and immortality. In Switzerland they see different kinds of worship of very different kinds of men with terrifying and tragic consequences. And when Long John Silver arrives, Oliver has to do some fast thinking to protect more than just his own life from the pirate who says he only cares about rescuing his daughter.  

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My Review:

Behold, the sequel to the first book I ever reviewed! (Not on this blog... But first ever!) 
I met "Sophronia" (a pen name) in a writer's group on Facebook, and she introduced me to her series, The Alexander Legacy, and the rousing Victorian steampunk adventures to be had!
Just this spring, I finally had the opportunity to purchase and download the sequel to the novel I enjoyed so much.
As is bound to happen with any series, the second book, while fair enough in its own right, doesn't quite match the fervor of the first one.
The pacing was a lot slower, and I felt like every time the novel introduced a new character, it was either a fresh enemy for this ambiguous quest (I'm sorry, but "Find Out What Professor Evil Is Up To And Stop Him" was never defined clearly enough... Not like the last book, when they were tracking down Spring-Heeled Jack and stopping a serial killer...) or a potential ally... In need of immediate proselytizing. The sheer number of long, drawn-out "come-to-Jesus" conversations is, ironically, the one thing I found most annoying while reading.
I say it is ironic because I, like Sophronia, am a Christian; wouldn't I want to "see these characters redeemed"? 
But I am also someone who respects the groundwork laid by somebody else when I use a character that isn't mine. And while there very well could have been Christian characters, certainly the authors themselves were not all thus, and certainly not to the extent that Sophronia is. 
Maybe that's what rubbed me the wrong way about this one: in "Tobacconist", the characters had been left largely in their own personas; we were just getting acquainted, and there were those who ascribed to religion and faith, and those who did not. Certainly I did not feel the urgent push to convert every character that this one gave off! For in this one, it really does seem like Sophronia really wanted to drive home the Gospel Truth in as many different facets as she could fit in one cover: from Oliver Twist and Jess Fagin deep in a very long conversation that both told her entire backstory and tried to convince a "hardened soul" that God's way is certainly the right way, to Sluefoot Sue trying to share whole story of the Bible in a garbled Texas accent. And in those moments, the characters were less "theirs" and more "hers," to the detriment of the whole effect. (That, and the inadvertent inclusion of such anachronistic phrases as "PDA" as in "Public Display of Affection"; pretty sure for one thing, they don't use acronyms like this in regular speech; for another, they would have very likely called it something different in Victorian slang... oops...) The appropriation, unfortunately, renders the novel as less of a "tribute" and more of an "inspired by" feel, nearly fanfiction but not quite.

Around these lengthy passages (that did virtually nothing for the plot, just gave a handful of fictional characters assurance of eternal life) the real tale was quite fun. Dr. Moreau, a brace of D'Urbervilles, Long John Silver the giant squid from "20,000 Leagues"... Oh, and Mac Campell shows up as the young engineer from an obscure Sherlock Holmes case that I was familiar enough with to recognize it immediately! I really got excited over that! Also I thought the description of Silver's daughter was really neat.

All in all, the "Pinocchio Factor" wins ****4 STARS**** from The Upstream Writer! The Alexander Legacy is a definite WIN for anybody who (like me) grew up reading the old Victorian classics and loving them greatly!
Further Reading: (Steampunk/Classics/Moral Message/Christian Authors)

The Alexander Legacy--Sophronia Belle Lyon
       -A Dodge, A Twist, and A Tobacconist
       -The Pinocchio Factor (*This book)
-Becoming Nikki--Ashley Elliot
-Countless As The Stars--Steve Trower 
Punk Anthologies--Writerpunk Press Group
      -Sound & Fury: Shakespeare Goes Punk, Vol. 1
      -Once More Unto The Breach: Shakespeare Goes Punk, Vol. 2 
      -What We've Unlearned: Classic Literature Goes Punk 

Dawn of Steam Trilogy--Jeffrey Cook
      -First Light
      -Gods of The Sun 
      -Rising Suns 

-Thimblerig's Ark--Nate Fleming 
-The Captives--Precarious Yates 
-Out of Darkness Rising--Gillian Bronte Adams

The Chronicles of Lorrek--Kelly Blanchard
        -Someday I'll Be Redeemed 
        -I Still Have A Soul 
        -I'm Still Alive 
        -Do You Trust Me? 
        -You Left Me No Choice

The Therian Way--Kimberly Rogers
       -Leopard's Heart 
       -Wolf's Path 
       -Tiger's Shadow 

The Cadeau Series--Connie Olvera
       -Who Can You Trust? 

The Time Tree Chronicles--Lisa Rae Morris
       -The Emergence 

The Painter Place Saga--Pamela Poole
       -Painter Place